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if you like to complete
we start this poetry, each one has his role:
she:
look at me and tell me am i you
i:
i don't know you, so don't ask me who?
you are sad like me, so i don't like to see
we're two souls in one body will be
or two wings of one bird flying high
in a vast sky, you, with me, tie
she:
No ties no vows you wont regret
Iam like ashes ready to hit
Stay away dont forget
Im your dankness your mess
Stay away dont get in
i:
i'll stay out not to make sin
you fill my ears with din
like smoke i can enter everywhere
and travel during future
my heart once told me about her
don't love, you'll torture
if you like to complete please feel free
thanks in advance
she:
look at me and tell me am i you
i:
i don't know you, so don't ask me who?
you are sad like me, so i don't like to see
we're two souls in one body will be
or two wings of one bird flying high
in a vast sky, you, with me, tie
she:
No ties no vows you wont regret
Iam like ashes ready to hit
Stay away dont forget
Im your dankness your mess
Stay away dont get in
i:
i'll stay out not to make sin
you fill my ears with din
like smoke i can enter everywhere
and travel during future
my heart once told me about her
don't love, you'll torture
if you like to complete please feel free
thanks in advance
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i:
listen to your heart dear
life is full with these
look here look there you'll see
life is not smoke not din
don't look to past even in dreams
you still have hope so carry the beams
light your life your soul
light it maybe you light my seeds
listen to your heart dear
life is full with these
look here look there you'll see
life is not smoke not din
don't look to past even in dreams
you still have hope so carry the beams
light your life your soul
light it maybe you light my seeds
be urself
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my heart dies when we meet
and i can't walk, move my feet
touch my chest and sense my pulse
you'll feel something else
don't cry for me or be sad
you're worse, your state is bad
and i can't walk, move my feet
touch my chest and sense my pulse
you'll feel something else
don't cry for me or be sad
you're worse, your state is bad
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I touch your chest l sense your plus
I feel something else
I find shiny dreams with little smiles
Shy tears unspoken eyes
Tell me who were you are
I feel something else
I find shiny dreams with little smiles
Shy tears unspoken eyes
Tell me who were you are
be urself
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how did u use 2 auxiliaries in this sentence, i couldn't understand it because of this...i couldn't name it as grammatical mistake ...but i thought it was a mistake...may be u have another purpose using this form....so plz explain itdreamer wrote:Tell me who were you are
2nd : i dont feel wishing to write lines of poetry...i don't know Y....u'r psychologist and can analyse my state.....
all friends have nice moments...
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freedom doesn't mean leaving grammar or writing wrong terms...we've to follow grammar to write correct sentences....e.g: i saw he....here we have to use him instead of he koz it is object here....and so on>>>>
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just ok..................waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw
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u have so much as i think...u r full of secrets,filled with contradicts, filled with goodness, filled with badness....filled with ......lots of things
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tell me more...i like to listen to u...i wana learn from u much
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Nothing to write nothing to tell
Our words are our treaures that's what a freind said
Our words are our treaures that's what a freind said
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these words r mine, my loyal friend...plz tell me wt u like to write ....u stopped writing lines
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Re: if you like to complete
shy tears unspoken eyesdreamer wrote: Shy tears unspoken eyes
confused dream so high flies
when will you water my thirst?
and guide me in dire mist
hug me to sleep for long
your heart's pulse is lovely song
complete .....
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let me nip on your arm
and make me so calm
softly tickle my head
your fingers on my cheek sled
and make me so calm
softly tickle my head
your fingers on my cheek sled
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long time i didn't see your face
long time i didn't look deeply in your eyes
they are like thousand of thunders
thousands of nights and what dark nights can i see
long time i didn't look deeply in your eyes
they are like thousand of thunders
thousands of nights and what dark nights can i see
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so long linddreamer wrote:thousands of nights and what dark nights can i see
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The man has not to put himself inside walls of silence and shell inside these walls, because he will find himself later that he pursues a mirage, and that he was sad reared its head from behind the words which is unmeaningful
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so it's my role but i can't fine u here, i think u left this game...if u like to continue so plz reply here and let's continue our game
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image a light inside a lighter
how shine can be ... how sad is he
surround with thousand siege how he can be free
like child catching a dream
like flower bending in breeze just waiting a chance to be released
how shine can be ... how sad is he
surround with thousand siege how he can be free
like child catching a dream
like flower bending in breeze just waiting a chance to be released
be urself
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so lovely...u r still the best my loyal friend, i wana teach from u lots
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u made me do this game with u, and u suddenly stopped , and as u know, in the beginning i didn't wish to say poetry but u could Pull the rug from under my feet in one way or other, i was like ice, without senses and u warmed me and now i feel like the first step...really i feel dead...i d k
but thanks 4 every thing
but thanks 4 every thing
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y??? wt apity!!! i hoped u say ur role , and u say my role but not stopping
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Re: if you like to complete
where's your line and if u wrote it then write another line instead of me, read my last comment carefully
shakespear wrote:y??? wt apity!!! i hoped u say ur role , and u say my role but not stopping
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r u there? y don't u reply and make ur role??????????????
i'm waiting
i'm waiting
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I wanna fly over there
I wanna fly heigh oh dear
Where Things get small
Where no at worries all
I wanna fly let me go
Leave my hand let me go
IWanna fly over there
I wanna fly heigh oh dear
Where Things get small
Where no at worries all
I wanna fly let me go
Leave my hand let me go
IWanna fly over there
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don't leave me alone, take me with you
my soul with you will leave me too
my soul's your slave, you slaved me
so don't leave me, with you i want to be
take me far, take me high
let me touch you, hear your sigh
my soul with you will leave me too
my soul's your slave, you slaved me
so don't leave me, with you i want to be
take me far, take me high
let me touch you, hear your sigh
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i wrote my role .........now it's urs...........i'm waiting
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don't leave me alone, take me with you
my soul with you will leave me too
my soul's your slave, you slaved me
so don't leave me, with you i want to be
take me far, take me high
let me touch you, hear your sigh
these r my last lines ...so wr r ur lines??????????????
my soul with you will leave me too
my soul's your slave, you slaved me
so don't leave me, with you i want to be
take me far, take me high
let me touch you, hear your sigh
these r my last lines ...so wr r ur lines??????????????
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sooner or later,all friends will quit
in my place alone i'll sit
why do all bad ideas come
all friends leave, i can't find some
you are my lone friend
your leave is my end
in my place alone i'll sit
why do all bad ideas come
all friends leave, i can't find some
you are my lone friend
your leave is my end
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Re: if you like to complete
look around raise your hand to them
you are not alone and that's not the end
life is full don't be dull
it's not only shades it's colorful
remove dark shades catch my hand and come
you are not alone and that's not the end
life is full don't be dull
it's not only shades it's colorful
remove dark shades catch my hand and come
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i see nothing, i see just dust
where are my friends, where's their lust
i can see your shadow, it's so sad
i'm yours, i'm not bad
for years, you try to vanish the sigh
you want to be lost in my eye
i fly with you, i fly and fly
i caught your hand, you took me so high
where are my friends, where's their lust
i can see your shadow, it's so sad
i'm yours, i'm not bad
for years, you try to vanish the sigh
you want to be lost in my eye
i fly with you, i fly and fly
i caught your hand, you took me so high
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Re: if you like to complete
take my hand follow me
you will see what i see
i see new world new life
take breathe and show me your best
you will see what i see
i see new world new life
take breathe and show me your best
be urself
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Re: if you like to complete
y always do you win?
y always do u show me my sin?
I shall follow u to the end
give me ur hand, your x, to me send
y always do u show me my sin?
I shall follow u to the end
give me ur hand, your x, to me send
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Re: if you like to complete
think carefully my friend
no one winner we all have sins
just drop all behind don't even think
take my hand i'm waiting to come
no one winner we all have sins
just drop all behind don't even think
take my hand i'm waiting to come
be urself
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Re: if you like to complete
angels have no sins
you're clear, white like ice
sometimes a loser wins
but you're nice and will still nice
i hope you'll go to the dise
it's not chance, it's not dice
you're clear, white like ice
sometimes a loser wins
but you're nice and will still nice
i hope you'll go to the dise
it's not chance, it's not dice
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Re: if you like to complete
why you're so black dear
days will shine don't see
i see your heart is like little star wait to appear
remove darkness of your heart and you'll see
days will shine don't see
i see your heart is like little star wait to appear
remove darkness of your heart and you'll see
be urself
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i can't remove it's sticked with me
and much shine, i can see
wars kill the hope the beam
i'm now far of the team
and much shine, i can see
wars kill the hope the beam
i'm now far of the team
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Re: if you like to complete
close your eyes
don't think of time
fight for yourself ..for your dreams
war can't kill your soul can't kill dreams
close your eyes and tell me what can you see
don't think of time
fight for yourself ..for your dreams
war can't kill your soul can't kill dreams
close your eyes and tell me what can you see
be urself
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closing my eyes, i see your eyes
they take me far to those shinny stars
i stretch my hands, my soul flies-
you raise your hand to stop all wars
you shout loudly come with me
look at the sky, can't you see?
all the stars and the shinny moon
come and you'll be happy soon
they take me far to those shinny stars
i stretch my hands, my soul flies-
you raise your hand to stop all wars
you shout loudly come with me
look at the sky, can't you see?
all the stars and the shinny moon
come and you'll be happy soon
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Re: if you like to complete
come with me
share me your dream
your soul is sweet lovely to be
remove past and say hello to life
share me your dream
your soul is sweet lovely to be
remove past and say hello to life
be urself
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Re: if you like to complete
can u bear my problems?
how can i share you?
how can i share you?
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